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The Collapse – 3LineTales

Sep
04
tltweek83

Photo by Dev Benjamin

All the birds that hovered overhead have fallen from the sky. A peninsula divided is once again united by war. When will we learn the opening shots are always words?

*Written as a response to the Three Line Tales Week 83 photo prompt.

**Sorry for the gloom. Recent news has been hitting close to home.

On a lighter note, should this be framed as a poem rather than prose? I’m getting a poetic vibe from it. Wholly unintentional.

All the birds that hovered overhead have fallen from the sky.

A peninsula divided is once again united by war.

When will we learn the opening shots are always words?

How does it look in verse? I feel like it would flow better if I cut “once again” in the middle line. Ideas?

~J.M.

One Response to The Collapse – 3LineTales

  1. Succinct and sadly topical. Works well as verse. But maybe a shorter first line would be punchier: ‘All the birds have fallen from the sky. And how about: ‘A peninsula undivided by war’?

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